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Post by Yuki on May 29, 2018 18:57:29 GMT -5
DEVIL FRUIT Name: Cryo Cryo No Mi (Freeze Freeze Fruit) Type: Paramecia Subtype: Manipulation DESCRIPTION Base Power: Cryo Cryo no Mi allows its user to create ice constructs from air moisture and water sources (except seawater) Rookie Devil Fruit: +25 meter range allows the user to be 25 meters from the construct they created, but the construct only lasts for the duration of the post it is created in Junior Devil Fruit: +1 post duration allows the construct created by the user to last one post longer for a total of 2 posts Journeyman Devil Fruit: +25 meter range allows the user to be 50 meters from the construct they created Expert Devil Fruit: +1 post duration allows the construct created by the user to last one post longer for a total of 3 posts Master Devil Fruit: +1 post duration allows the construct created by the user to last one post longer for a total of 4 posts Weaknesses: The weaknesses that all devil fruit user have, such as being unable to swim, apply to Cryo-Cryo no Mi as well. Due to its nature,
the fruit is also weak against fire-based fruits and fire-based powers in general.
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Post by Admin on May 29, 2018 19:08:50 GMT -5
APPROVED!
Your Devil Fruit can have Ranged Moves!
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Post by Hina on Jun 30, 2018 13:47:47 GMT -5
Review only, Full approval will follow by the hand of someone else, disregard the above.
The description of the base power is ok, although almost too specific. What you can do with it is generally handled in moves and just saying "User can crate ice constructs from air moisture and water sources (bar salt/seawater)" or somesuch would suffice. For the ranks, they need a little more explanation as to what the bonuses effectively mean. Such as range could mean how far away the constructs can be from the user before melting away very quickly and duration should also be elaborated a little more on, to mention the total maximum duration of a construct. See for example the Kugi Kugi no Mi for a reference (http://onepieceworld.boards.net/thread/161/kugi-mi). Finally, weaknesses should probably also include heat, since it's ice; as well as the range, as the construct would likely melt once outside of the power's influence radius. Possibly also some guideline for breaking creations with force (again, feel free to use Kugi as reference with how outranking the user allows a victim to break free of the nails easier)
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Post by Yuki on Jun 30, 2018 17:55:13 GMT -5
After careful consideration, I've decided to cash this for later.
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