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Moonlightbutterfly
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Post by moonlightbutterfly on Jun 27, 2018 21:19:52 GMT -5
Organic Shooting Category: Marksman Theme: Use of a Rifle augmented by Pop Greens Element: Pop Greens Bonus: +1 power (Damage) Rank to Moves DESCRIPTION Rookie Style: Mina uses the rifle as intended, it being a model similar to the one marines use but with slight differences like higher caliber and slightly faster fire rate due to a faster responding percussion cap. Junior Style: Mina can now use lesser pop greens in addition to the faster responding percussion cap to fire bullets at even faster, and thus do more damage, incorporating minor pop green effects that can't damage things as much as serve small utility functions. Journeyman Style: Mina can now incorporate pop greens into her bullets. At this point Pop Greens are intrinsically a part of the bullets, bolstering the total power of her bullets beyond what would normally be possible by using the many types of Pop Greens. Expert Style: At this point Pop Greens are intrinsically a part of the bullets, bolstering the total power of her bullets beyond what would normally be possible by using the many types of Pop Greens to an even greater degree, able to now make more complex and independent constructs than before. Master Style: Her pop green bullets are now able to act almost as a living force of nature, now able to do things like fracture the ground apart to generate earthquakes and other inhumanly powerful effects.
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Hihyō Hihyō no Mi
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Post by Zadi on Jun 27, 2018 22:25:50 GMT -5
Hello, I'll be grading your Style~ Alright, so the first thing which needs to be done is to narrow the focus of this Style; 1-2 short sentences for each level. Do not include specific ammunition types unless they pertain to how the element is achieved. Speaking of the element - choose between dials or pop greens. They are both very versatile and therefore better suited to separate Styles. I'll grade everything else when the above is complete. -------- Bump this thread and link in discord again when the editing is complete. Thank you for submitting a Style~
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Hihyō Hihyō no Mi
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Post by Zadi on Jun 28, 2018 10:55:56 GMT -5
I've been having second thoughts about letting "pop greens" be an element, but it's just plants and nothing more. Anyway, just two things I need done;
Bonus - take out the (damage) mention or take out the speed mention. Either an increase to strength or speed, not both.
Expert - staff has decided the emotional state is best explained within the Super Talent and move with which it must be registered later one. So please remove the "emotional state" mention.
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when that's done, bump the thread and link within discord~
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Hihyō Hihyō no Mi
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Post by Zadi on Jun 28, 2018 15:29:23 GMT -5
Ok, approved~
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