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Post by Haoquin Yaegar on Jun 26, 2018 10:39:59 GMT -5
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Post by Straw Hat Boy on Jun 27, 2018 2:10:41 GMT -5
Hello! I will be reviewing your application today. Now, before I begin, let me mention that I am a trainee moderator hence I can neither deny nor approve your application. This is a review.
Overall looks good! However, the last one seems kind of tricky to me. First, it is not exactly a profession; as professions are simple, technical roles/jobs; leaders, cooks, smiths, doctors, etc. A weapon master is unique to your character himself.
The second thing about it that I'd like to bring up is that I feel it's pretty vague. What do you mean when you say that he could become a master of each weapon? If you actually intend to become a master of each and every weapon, I feel as if it would not be possible - because characters could only potentially specialize in two fighting styles, including separate weapons.
-Mugen
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Post by Straw Hat Boy on Jun 27, 2018 13:43:56 GMT -5
Looking better, however, I'd like you to make a few changes. Firstly, you can not have three enhanced senses in one talent. One talent equals for one heightened sense. Second, your description of the senses is rather vague. The maximum you could have for each sense is the following: For an enhanced eyesight, 20/10 vision. For enhanced hearing, you would be able to listen to the faintest sounds in the range of 25 meters, maximum. That also applies to his sense of smell.
-Mugen
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The Pirate King
235 posts
Monkey Boy
Unknown Beli
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Master Rank
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Post by Admin on Jun 28, 2018 11:02:44 GMT -5
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